Portfolio One

I really need to work on my verb tense. I never really noticed it until you pointed out to me in my rough draft. I constantly found myself proof reading and have to correct myself. Another issue I have, is getting my ideas out of my head and making them sound good on paper. This is one concept that has plagued my writing since I was little. It seems I always have this great idea in my head, but it never translates right when I write it out. I really have problems string my sentences together as well. Whenever I write my thoughts get scattered and I end up writing many sentences out of place. I need to find a strategy that would help me complete my thoughts, before moving on to the next. Fully expressing myself on paper is a constant struggle that I really need some help with. One other item in my paper that needs work is punctuation. I have never been able find where I needed a comma, semi colon, or a colon. And as you also pointed out in my rough draft I need to work on finding out when I need to hyphenate words.
I am really hoping to fix some of these problems soon. The verb tense isn't a huge one, and I think I can easily fix that by being a little more concentrated when I write. Expressing myself on paper is going to be a difficult task to correct. During this narrative I found that writing things down on paper before hand helped a bit. I have also found that if I think about writing what I want during my daily route, it comes easier when I sit down to write. But if you have any suggestions, they would be greatly appreciated. Connecting my thoughts will be something I will work on as time goes on. I find if I give myself more time write, stop, and then come back to it , my thought flow a little better. So over all I have a lot of improvements that need to be worked on, but its nothing I think I can't accomplish.